No Weather-Controlling Device for You

Stop telling me how full the moon is. Full moons are expensive. And you never use them for plot. You're just trying to have your own 'Truman Show.'

No, you can't 'cue the sun.' A little weather now and then doesn't hurt if it's plot related. Break-ups happen during storms, sunlight breaks through with new hope, rain equals rebirth... Fine.

But 'Because it's cool' is not plot related.


PS: I know I've said this, but stop giving resumes in character descriptions! Remember: If the audience can't see or hear it, it doesn't exist.

Wake with a... STOP

"She wakes with a start." "He jolts awake. IT WAS JUST A DREAM!" "They sit bolt upright in bed..."

I could go on but I won't. Nor should you.

Waking startled is a trope. Proceed at your own risk.

They Don't Sell Pretty at the Wal-Mart?

Yes, describing a happy, nice-looking person who lives in a poor part of town with the phrase 'she clearly doesn't belong here' is insulting. There are good looking people in lower-income families. *SHOCK* some of them even laugh from time to time.

If this is a newsflash you should really get out more. There's, like, trees and sunlight and stuff out there. You could enjoy it.

Even if you're not middle class.

Neither Seen Nor Heard

A screenwriter who mentions the camera is like a magician who mentions the strings.

/the more you know